Taking on warring Texas drug cartels, two cowgirls, an Iraq vet of color and an ex-NYC fashion model, have 72 hours to save a son from kidnappers.?

First, let me say I’m glad to see you’re using Ink Tip. It’s a fabulous resource. Don’t be confused by the fact that you see a “hit” on a logline, as there is no guarantee it was even read. It may have just come up in a search for “keywords” such as “drug cartel” or “Texas”. That being said, the second logline is a bit better than the first but it still reads a little more messy than it should. I don’t see the need for the “of color” in the logline, even if it does have something to do with the plot. The “hook” seems to be the incongruity of the group. How does this odd-ball group gt thrown together to take on a drug cartel? I would concentrate on that, even leaving the kidnapping story out of the logline.

I’m interested in seeing how this plays out in the best logline it can be!