1. Posted: August 22, 2013In:

    A fledging actress, unlucky in love, must decide whether to risk it all or play it safe for the “happily ever after” she wants.

    SLClibra

    Point taken.I'm trying to edit it right now with something with more substance, but the site doesn't seem to want to let me do that. Thanks for the feedback!

    Point taken.I’m trying to edit it right now with something with more substance, but the site doesn’t seem to want to let me do that. Thanks for the feedback!

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  2. Posted: August 21, 2013In:

    A cyber terrorist agent whose memory has been reprogrammed must choose between rescuing his identity and wife, or containing disastrous black market software.

    SLClibra

    What will the black market software do if it's not contained? Instead of "disastrous" I would try to include exactly what it would do, and take out "black market" because the software is obviously illegal if it's that destructive.

    What will the black market software do if it’s not contained? Instead of “disastrous” I would try to include exactly what it would do, and take out “black market” because the software is obviously illegal if it’s that destructive.

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  3. Posted: July 23, 2013In:

    After falling victim to a humiliating prank by the high school Queen Bee, best friends and world-class geeks, Mindy and Jodi, decide to get their revenge by uniting the outcasts of the school against her and her circle of friends.

    SLClibra

    I would take out "world-class geeks" because the fact they were already targeted by a "Queen Bee" gives that pictuure.

    I would take out “world-class geeks” because the fact they were already targeted by a “Queen Bee” gives that pictuure.

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