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Posted: December 29, 2016In: Crime

Street level dealer wanting more from life plans to import her own product triggering kidnap, murder and a war she cannot survive.

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Added an answer on December 30, 2016 at 4:13 pm

Hi Craig, I get it that the meat of the story is going to be how she survives the war she unleashes. Ja? I think "A street level drug dealer" might give just a bit more clarity with the opening line. Some other ideas. "small time drug dealer" "ex narc? turned drug dealer" "Ex narc turns to selling dRead more

Hi Craig,

I get it that the meat of the story is going to be how she survives the war she unleashes. Ja?

I think “A street level drug dealer” might give just a bit more clarity with the opening line.

Some other ideas.

“small time drug dealer”

“ex narc? turned drug dealer”

“Ex narc turns to selling drugs to…”

On the back end “street war” sounds a little more bad ass too.

I do agree that the character as presented is not very likable. If she simply wants “more from life” then she is just another lowlife who will do anything for a buck. If she is saving money for her son’s new kidney however…..hey now, this is a drug dealer I can kind of like.

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Posted: December 29, 2016In: Comedy

A perfectionist Youtube star’s page views plummet when she falls for a hang loose gamer geek. Their PDA insecurities and her scheming manager threaten to ctrl+alt+delete their dreams to go public with their “In a relationship” status.

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Added an answer on December 30, 2016 at 3:50 pm

Hi Nir,Thanks for your feedback. If it's hard to understand then I have not done my job creating the logline.Hang loose is intended to be the opposite of perfectionist, hence the irony and an interesting part of the two main characters' love story.PDA = Public display of affection. I thought that teRead more

Hi Nir,

Thanks for your feedback. If it’s hard to understand then I have not done my job creating the logline.

Hang loose is intended to be the opposite of perfectionist, hence the irony and an interesting part of the two main characters’ love story.

PDA = Public display of affection. I thought that terms was common enough to be understood in the logline. It’s American English. ?I’ll have to reconsider.

Ctrl+alt+delete is just a cheeky was of saying “derail” or “thwart”. ?I intended it to sound technical since the movie is about social media and dating in modern times.

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