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A mute man is graced with the power to read minds. As he climbs the social ladder he struggles to work out his place in society.
The concept of a mute man who can read minds is a good one, combining a serious weakness/hurdle (being mute) with a power/gift - lots of potential with this set up. But the 2nd sentence is a bit nothing - climbing the social ladder and trying to find his place....sure, this should happen through theRead more
The concept of a mute man who can read minds is a good one, combining a serious weakness/hurdle (being mute) with a power/gift – lots of potential with this set up. But the 2nd sentence is a bit nothing – climbing the social ladder and trying to find his place….sure, this should happen through the film, just like a character should improve, but it shouldn’t be your logline. The logline should describe the action/conflict in which such change and soul searching can take place.
Perhaps the mute-mind-reader is tempted by criminals that want to use his powers?
Perhaps he has to overcome discrimination due to his disability?
Perhaps, like many a good story, he ultimate must realise his strength is not his mind reading power but a deeper inner humanity and ability to overcome?
Good luck!
See lessWhen a sailor's young son is taken out to sea by ghosts on his father's boat, the father struggles to get his son back after the superstitious townspeople refuse to be involved with a "haunted" boat.
Looks interesting - here is the same idea tweaked a little, in case it helps: "When ghosts commandeer his boat and take his young son, a sailor has until dawn to overcome superstitious townspeople and assemble a rescue team to save his boy from purgatory." Good luck!
Looks interesting – here is the same idea tweaked a little, in case it helps:
“When ghosts commandeer his boat and take his young son, a sailor has until dawn to overcome superstitious townspeople and assemble a rescue team to save his boy from purgatory.”
Good luck!
See lessA woman who tries to raise her catatonic son on her own suddenly discovers a shocking secret about him.
....and then? This provides a dramatic set-up, but where does it go? We don't necessarily need to know what the shocking secret is, but we need to know that its discovery will compel certain action - "discovers a shocking secret about him.... "...that she must hide from the authorities or it will teRead more
….and then? This provides a dramatic set-up, but where does it go?
We don’t necessarily need to know what the shocking secret is, but we need to know that its discovery will compel certain action – “discovers a shocking secret about him….
“…that she must hide from the authorities or it will tear apart her family”?
“…that she must expose to bring down the military experiments that put her son in a coma”
“…that may not only provide the key to awakening him, but…..”
Starting to answer some of that may paint your story a little more clearly.
cheers
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