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After publicly exposing his unique abilities a guilt-ridden teenager must defend his loved ones from the consuming evil that comes to recruit him.
I like this so far! "exposing his unique abilities" to me sounds vague. Almost as if it's supposed to be a euphemism for something that I should know about. [All-]"Consuming Evil" is also vague, and overused. I'd rather know what it is. Call it a Decepticon if it's a Decepticon! "defend" is anotherRead more
I like this so far!
“exposing his unique abilities” to me sounds vague. Almost as if it’s supposed to be a euphemism for something that I should know about.
[All-]”Consuming Evil” is also vague, and overused. I’d rather know what it is. Call it a Decepticon if it’s a Decepticon!
“defend” is another vague word. I mean, doesn’t pretty much every hero in every story defend something from some thing/one?
See lessIn a post-apocalyptic wasteland, when a government transporter with a death-wish learns that his long dead brother is alive he teams up with an escaped experimental super-soldier and a sassy resistance fighter to find his lost brother and stop a deranged government scientist who is experimenting on children.
I had to plow through 21 words before hitting the subject of the sentence. I managed to make it through the next couple of words, then gave up. I love the ideas, but it's really too dense. It felt like chewing through five pounds of delicious steak.
I had to plow through 21 words before hitting the subject of the sentence. I managed to make it through the next couple of words, then gave up. I love the ideas, but it’s really too dense. It felt like chewing through five pounds of delicious steak.
See lessWhen a team of zombie fighting monsters loses their commander a rookie Griffin steps up to lead them through the horde of New York City so they can deliver an immune human to a secure location for testing.
To me, this really isn't jumping out. Making them monsters helps, but the basic story still feels cliched. You know, the untested-rookie-gets-stuck-with-the-most-important-job sort of thing. The story of an immune human reminds me of countless other "the infected" stories (such as the film version oRead more
To me, this really isn’t jumping out. Making them monsters helps, but the basic story still feels cliched.
You know, the untested-rookie-gets-stuck-with-the-most-important-job sort of thing. The story of an immune human reminds me of countless other “the infected” stories (such as the film version of “I am Legend”).
As far as suggestions, maybe turn it into a comedy, satirizing these types of stories? Maybe, zombies get “infected” by human spit, which makes them back into normal people and it’s up to an “uninfectable” zombie to bite all the human spitters before he is destroyed.
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