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After learning that his father did not die when was 7 a prodigious investment banker sets off to find his dad, and does, at a silent monk monastery halfway across the world
impliation???... indication ;) intersting???... interesting. My bad.
impliation???… indication 😉
intersting???… interesting. My bad.
See lessAfter learning that his father did not die when was 7 a prodigious investment banker sets off to find his dad, and does, at a silent monk monastery halfway across the world
As others have said -- there is no impliation of a struggle to achieve said goal... no struggle means there's no drama --no drama, no real interest...regardless of the genre. His goal currently = Find presumed dead Father. He does. The end. Yes, he finds him in an intersting world, but that's it. WeRead more
As others have said — there is no impliation of a struggle to achieve said goal… no struggle means there’s no drama –no drama, no real interest…regardless of the genre. His goal currently = Find presumed dead Father. He does. The end. Yes, he finds him in an intersting world, but that’s it. We need to know (well, at least I do…) ‘objetively’ WHY he has to find his Father, and what is the big deal (in the storyworld) in regards to the Father choosing a monastic lifestyle..? … IOW – why would the MC care that his Father is now a monk… I mean, he’s just found out he’s alive, and he has managed to find him…
There is certainly potential for a great story with the set-up you’ve given, it’s just that at the moment the logline only delivers on the set-up… a logline needs to give us an interesting (ironically flawed) character with a clearly defined goal, with an either stated or implied risk that equates to life or death, either physically or metaphysically. With this iteration of the logline I can’t see what is at stake… And that’s vital for care factor.
Best of luck with your future drafts.
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... and speaking of grammar nazi's ...: must=most. ;)
… and speaking of grammar nazi’s …: must=most.
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