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The complexities of dealing with the suicide of a loved one, taint the innocence of a young boy's formative years. They leave in their wake a man with a powerful urge to mix pleasure and violence. The only thing keeping him from acting out his morbid fantasies is a gnawing conscience. But as his desires gain ground, the man he strives to be loses it's grip, plunging him into the blackness of his own broken mind. He ultimately seeks redemption, but he can never be free from the demons that torment him.
The only thing I would add above what Nir and dpg have said is just technical: You should give yourself the restriction of using only 30 words or under and only one sentence for the logline. Not only is this Industry standard, but it forces you to focus only on the meat of the story... Which is theRead more
The only thing I would add above what Nir and dpg have said is just technical: You should give yourself the restriction of using only 30 words or under and only one sentence for the logline. Not only is this Industry standard, but it forces you to focus only on the meat of the story… Which is the only thing a logline needs to express… Main character, what they want, what stands in their way from getting that (or what they have to do to get it) and what’s at stake if they don’t get what they want. If these things aren’t specifically expressed they should at least be implied… In 30 words or less.
Best of luck.
See lessThe complexities of dealing with the suicide of a loved one, taint the innocence of a young boy's formative years. They leave in their wake a man with a powerful urge to mix pleasure and violence. The only thing keeping him from acting out his morbid fantasies is a gnawing conscience. But as his desires gain ground, the man he strives to be loses it's grip, plunging him into the blackness of his own broken mind. He ultimately seeks redemption, but he can never be free from the demons that torment him.
The only thing I would add above what Nir and dpg have said is just technical: You should give yourself the restriction of using only 30 words or under and only one sentence for the logline. Not only is this Industry standard, but it forces you to focus only on the meat of the story... Which is theRead more
The only thing I would add above what Nir and dpg have said is just technical: You should give yourself the restriction of using only 30 words or under and only one sentence for the logline. Not only is this Industry standard, but it forces you to focus only on the meat of the story… Which is the only thing a logline needs to express… Main character, what they want, what stands in their way from getting that (or what they have to do to get it) and what’s at stake if they don’t get what they want. If these things aren’t specifically expressed they should at least be implied… In 30 words or less.
Best of luck.
See lessIn the final moments before facing the firing squad, the charismatic leader of a murderous robbery gang makes one last request: to have her confession heard by the priest who was once her lover.
....or -- going down the spiritual/ metaphysical route: A murderous bank robber on death row must forgive her ex lover, the prison's Priest, for jilting her, if he is to save her soul by administering her the last rites. Long way from perfect (but I think this is the jist of your premise? But I'm stRead more
….or — going down the spiritual/ metaphysical route:
A murderous bank robber on death row must forgive her ex lover, the prison’s Priest, for jilting her, if he is to save her soul by administering her the last rites.
Long way from perfect (but I think this is the jist of your premise? But I’m still a bit confused — Isn’t it the duty of Catholic Priest’s to forgive those on death row regardless of the criminal asking for forgiveness for their crimes..?) — but I think you can do away with your current first sentence, as well as “When they meet again…” Simply by stating that he’s her ex (or childhood sweetheart or whatever…) is enough to suggest that they have a past… or are meeting again etc…
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