An intriguing concept, but needs tightening as a logline. ATM there is no protagonist and no goal — two essentials for a logline. By opening with “after two boys disappear from…” means you are creating perspective from someone else other than the two boys (whom I’m assuming are your intended protags…”. You should pick ONE hero and write from their POV (obviously just an example…):

“When attempting to go AWOL, a cowardly air force pilot stumbles across a secret government experiment that sends him back in time to the battle of Britain, and his only way home is to find a legendary pilot who’s been lost for 50 years…”

Lastly, ‘boys’ seems odd… I’m imagining 12 and under… What would two ‘boys’ be doing at an air force base?

Anyway, best of luck.

Hi Nicholasandrewhalls —

I think this has potential — but my main issue with it, I guess, is a story one — in that, I find it hard to swallow that a professional woman would go to such lengths to save a relationship with someone who is into LARPing — -not to rag on the pastime — but it has always seemed associated with…dare I say it– nerds (again — really no offence intended if this happens to be something you’re into 🙂 )… or maybe a bit adolescent — (I know adults who are into it — but I hope you see what I mean…) Thinking of a female doctor that’s prepared to go to such lengths to SAVE this relationship just doesn’t sit right with me. It could be what makes it startlingly original though… — or it could be what makes it work on another level…

What if she enters the LARP to seek revenge upon him? They have this relationship… she’s always looked down upon the LARP world he’s into — she’s an uptight career focused Dr… he’s a jerk… she busts him cheating on her with some LARP wench — and her plan begins…? … she gets so obsessed with revenge that her career wanes, but she learns that life is for living (or something along those lines) though her conquering of the LARP.

‘When a career obsessed doctor catches her Live Action Role Playing obsessed boyfriend cheating on her, she secretly joins the LARP to destroy his dream of winning the national championship.’

Bit of a mouthful — but I think there definitely needs to be a reference to LARP– using the full term in reference to the boyfriend then makes it plain as to what it means and the acronym can be used later in the logline…

— again, don’t mean to mess with your story — but if this was my baby it would be the road I’d go down.

Best of luck with it.