1. Posted: October 2, 2013In:

    When a father and son novice racing team decides to enter the Baja 500 they face challenges to survive not only the race but drug dealers and corrupt Mexican military.

    Tony Edward Samurai

    Hi LoglinesRUS, Just thought I'd add my two cents to this -- atm the logline feels as if it's missing out on some dramatic potential that you've touched upon in the above thread --'...Maybe the son, or father, did not really want to go on this adventure and is an unwilling participant...' For me, thRead more

    Hi LoglinesRUS,

    Just thought I’d add my two cents to this —

    atm the logline feels as if it’s missing out on some dramatic potential that you’ve touched upon in the above thread –‘…Maybe the son, or father, did not really want to go on this adventure and is an unwilling participant…’
    For me, this would be the most compelling element to this story — especially if the Father and son are either estranged, or have a bad relationship and the Father has entered them in the race to repair it… What about:

    ‘When his estranged Father, his co-driver, is taken hostage by a corrupt Mexican military during the Baja500, a spoilt college drop-up must choose between winning the race and saving his Father.’

    Anyway — that’s just what I see in my head… Best of luck with it.

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  2. Posted: October 2, 2013In:

    After learning she has inherited her famous poker champion Father?s debt to the Mafia, a straight laced school teacher sets out to become the world?s first female world series of poker champion.

    Tony Edward Samurai

    Thanks dpg -- you're absolutely right -- I threw this up very quickly (just at logline/ concept stage atm...), and the whole Mafia angle was definitely a quick fix. This, coupled with the protag's description of 'straight laced' reads as a lazy logline, but you've given me some good food for thoughtRead more

    Thanks dpg — you’re absolutely right — I threw this up very quickly (just at logline/ concept stage atm…), and the whole Mafia angle was definitely a quick fix. This, coupled with the protag’s description of ‘straight laced’ reads as a lazy logline, but you’ve given me some good food for thought.

    Another idea I’ve had is of her Father being a FAILED poker pro — maybe poker/ gambling destroyed the family — hence her being completely (at first) against the ‘sport’ (hence my first pass at a description of her as ‘straight laced’, when what I really meant is that she is someone that would never play poker…)… but now I just need to find a suitable catalyst — maybe if Dad is dying..? Not sure. I’ll continue to hammer it out.

    Thanks again.

    …and by the by — I also wanted to thank you for the feedback on ‘Selfie’ — I appreciated your feedback, which also gave me a good laugh — and I actually wrote you a reply, in fact, a freaking behemoth of a reply… I went in to edit it (well… to trash my reply) and inadvertently ended up sending the logline to trash by mistake… doh…. or maybe not… ;0

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  3. Posted: September 29, 2013In:

    The reckless son of a marijuana grower falls in love with the naive daughter of the local sheriff who is determined to eradicate marijuana cultivation in this modern retelling of Romeo and Juliet.

    Tony Edward Samurai

    Great points by dpg there -- if it was set in the, say, early sixties it could work well. Man... I'm living in the wrong country, Best of luck with it.

    Great points by dpg there — if it was set in the, say, early sixties it could work well.

    Man… I’m living in the wrong country,

    Best of luck with it.

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