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After his daughter's forced to spend the week at his job and discovers he's actually cool at work, a henpecked husband, begins to stand up for himself against his, domineering wife.
If the dad is the hero, then I think the inciting incident needs to be from his POV -- atm his daughter makes a discovery -- it's 'after something happens' to HER... maybe have a play with 'After something happens' to a dominated but loyal husband and father etc... Anyway -- best of luck again, RichRead more
If the dad is the hero, then I think the inciting incident needs to be from his POV — atm his daughter makes a discovery — it’s ‘after something happens’ to HER… maybe have a play with ‘After something happens’ to a dominated but loyal husband and father etc…
Anyway — best of luck again, Richiev.
See lessAfter his daughter's forced to spend the week at his job and discovers he's actually cool at work, a henpecked husband, begins to stand up for himself against his, domineering wife.
Hi Richiev, I think I see what you're trying to go for -- but it's a struggle to get a grip on this with the 'Dad' acting as the protagonist... for this to work the only inciting incident I could foresee would be for the daughter to do something that would force the Dad to change -- like threateningRead more
Hi Richiev,
I think I see what you’re trying to go for — but it’s a struggle to get a grip on this with the ‘Dad’ acting as the protagonist… for this to work the only inciting incident I could foresee would be for the daughter to do something that would force the Dad to change — like threatening to run away (or something) unless he changes — (as atm, as dpg has pointed out, there really is no PHYSICAL inciting incident…) and really difficult sqeeezing this into a coherent logline. Below is just my idea using the daughter as the protag — and I know it’s not what you have in mind… but anywho:
“When a precocious teenager discovers her mum and uncle are having an affair she attempts to transform her dweeby loser dad into cool hipster romantic to woo back her mum and keep her family together.”
Best of luck.
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