1. Posted: July 8, 2013In:

    When a woman from another planet falls down from the sky, A father who has lost his wife and son, helps the woman get back to where she came from.

    Tony Edward Samurai

    Great point dpg...all the logline needs imo.

    Great point dpg…all the logline needs imo.

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  2. Posted: July 10, 2013In:

    Short Film: A frustrated white collar man, unintentionally undergo a comical journey of social scrutiny and conditioning experiences in the park, leading to his awakening/revelation about the society.

    Tony Edward Samurai

    I.e. "in an effort to prove his new marketing pitch for fresh fruit a desperate advertising exec strips naked in front of a large lunch time crowd in central park'

    I.e. “in an effort to prove his new marketing pitch for fresh fruit a desperate advertising exec strips naked in front of a large lunch time crowd in central park’

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  3. Posted: July 10, 2013In:

    Short Film: A frustrated white collar man, unintentionally undergo a comical journey of social scrutiny and conditioning experiences in the park, leading to his awakening/revelation about the society.

    Tony Edward Samurai

    Too much hinting going on here... I think you need to describe exactly what the 'social scrutiny and conditioning experiences' actually are. Leaving this out does not make for an intruiging logline but for a vague one.

    Too much hinting going on here… I think you need to describe exactly what the ‘social scrutiny and conditioning experiences’ actually are. Leaving this out does not make for an intruiging logline but for a vague one.

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