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Acting in concert, objects start to refuse to be a part of bad actions for no apparent reason
"...It could be close to ?Koyaanisqatsi? ? but with a story..." ... The story is what is lacking, which is what the logline should communicate -- what we've got at the moment is a pitch... and really just the concept. Good luck!
“…It could be close to ?Koyaanisqatsi? ? but with a story…” …
The story is what is lacking, which is what the logline should communicate — what we’ve got at the moment is a pitch… and really just the concept.
Good luck!
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I think you've got an interesting concept -- but I think you still need a character and a plot that an audience can experience this unique situation through... otherwise the logline is nonsensical and becomes a collection of images (hence my post in regards to Koyaanisqatsi) A point of reference --Read more
I think you’ve got an interesting concept — but I think you still need a character and a plot that an audience can experience this unique situation through… otherwise the logline is nonsensical and becomes a collection of images (hence my post in regards to Koyaanisqatsi)
A point of reference — ‘Rhinoceros’ by Eugene Lonesco, fittingly belonging to the theater of the absurd (got turned into a film in 1974…), with every person in a town, one by one, turning into Rhinos — We still have a hero who witnesses the phenomenon so that we the audience can…
Anyway — good luck… I do like the cut of your jib!
See lessThwarted at every attempt to win over the girl of his dreams, an awkward boy (8) has to overcome his deepest fear to draw her into a magical world.
Hi dpg -- yes, you're right on the 'Moonlight Kingdom' front -- it's a great love story because of the mutual love the lovers have for each other, which is strengthened through the adversity against their relationship from the adults.... 'Thwarted at every attempt to win over the boy of her dreams,Read more
Hi dpg — yes, you’re right on the ‘Moonlight Kingdom’ front — it’s a great love story because of the mutual love the lovers have for each other, which is strengthened through the adversity against their relationship from the adults….
‘Thwarted at every attempt to win over the boy of her dreams, an awkward girl (8) has to overcome her deepest fear to draw him into a magical world’
… still sexist?…
To me it’s not implicitly sexist — it’s just, I don’t know, wrong, given the age of the protag — again, just my opinion.
I do see your point though — and personally I feel it’s cause is in the use/ implication of ‘win’..?
Maybe this revision:
‘A terminally shy young boy with a unique magical view of the world must overcome his shyness when he meets a girl who seems to share his unique vision’
Just my stab — without knowing any specifics of the story…which would be great to know.
Good luck with it Carmen.
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