1. Posted: July 2, 2012In:

    To save his country from invaders and win the hand of his childhood sweetheart (the king?s now widowed daughter), a disgraced young nobleman must triumph in the Knights League: a year-long tournament followed like a sport by rich and poor alike.

    wereviking

    Yeah I am after a mechanical analysis of the logline, not whether a story that hasn't been read should be aborted. Thanks. I have mixed feelings about the advice on this one, but it is all helpful.

    Yeah I am after a mechanical analysis of the logline, not whether a story that hasn’t been read should be aborted. Thanks. I have mixed feelings about the advice on this one, but it is all helpful.

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  2. Posted: July 2, 2012In:

    To save his country from invaders and win the hand of his childhood sweetheart (the king?s now widowed daughter), a disgraced young nobleman must triumph in the Knights League: a year-long tournament followed like a sport by rich and poor alike.

    wereviking

    I submitted the logline for comments, not the pitch.

    I submitted the logline for comments, not the pitch.

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  3. Posted: May 25, 2012In:

    After a twisted psychopath is murdered, an evil entity targets the current lineage of those responsible to husk, and kill them to sate his revenge.

    wereviking

    Shucking? Not sure what the aversion is to a straight-forward "skinning". Is it just the means of killing? Would be cool to do more with it than that. Is that who your protagonist was already or has she just emerged through the logline process? Some hook or what the Americans call an ironic twist stRead more

    Shucking? Not sure what the aversion is to a straight-forward “skinning”. Is it just the means of killing? Would be cool to do more with it than that. Is that who your protagonist was already or has she just emerged through the logline process? Some hook or what the Americans call an ironic twist still seems to be missing.

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