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After they spend a night together falling in love, a couple part ways because of WWII, and years later, the man, presumed dead, turns up at her hometown to win her back – only to discover she is married.
When it comes to Romance stories, this is one of my favorite plots. Unfortunately, that is the main problem with your logline. Since this is a well know plot, you have to tell us what sets your story apart from all other stories based upon the same idea. The more specific the details, the better.
When it comes to Romance stories, this is one of my favorite plots.
Unfortunately, that is the main problem with your logline. Since this is a well know plot, you have to tell us what sets your story apart from all other stories based upon the same idea. The more specific the details, the better.
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The title suggests this is going to be a satire, while the logline suggests a thriller, however, you've classified this as a drama. In a drama it is the relationships between the principle characters that drives the story forward, not nefarious plots, but those relationships are missing in your loglRead more
The title suggests this is going to be a satire, while the logline suggests a thriller, however, you’ve classified this as a drama. In a drama it is the relationships between the principle characters that drives the story forward, not nefarious plots, but those relationships are missing in your logline. I assume she will have to deal with the cult leader, so tell us who he/she is and why he/she is so dangerous. Also, why does she love her sister so much she is willing to risk her life and sister’s life to get her out? How does she even know her sister wants out?
As for the plot, what is the inciting incident? Why must she free her sister now? She has been out of the cult for a year, what’s the hurry to act now? Why not join the FBI and come back in four years, fully trained, with the full might of the Justice department behind her?
See lessAfter a heated fallout with her former band mate, a determined singer signs a deal with a ruthless CEO unknowingly in the gangster lifestyle, who fills her head with promises and solo stardom, as she forms a greed dictated rivalry with her formal partner that culminates to tragedy.
You need to pare down the premise to find the center of your story. For example, the inciting incident is probably not the singer's fallout with her old band, but the signing of the contract with the mobster, who by the way will be either a "promoter" or a "producer" and, for an unknown singer, defiRead more
You need to pare down the premise to find the center of your story. For example, the inciting incident is probably not the singer’s fallout with her old band, but the signing of the contract with the mobster, who by the way will be either a “promoter” or a “producer” and, for an unknown singer, definitely not a CEO.? As for the tragedy, be more specific. Different people have different understanding of what constitutes a tragedy. Did the promoter have the ambitious singer’s competitor/friend murdered to smooth the way for her rise? Or does the promoter pump her full will drugs during her rise and leaves her in the gutter, having stolen all her money?
Deborah_b suggest concentrating on the rivalry. If you want to go that route, you need two strong characters. The singer you have as the MC and one in the old band. In that case, the promoter’s role will be reduced and could probably be left out of the logline in favor of some information about the rival.
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