[Revisedx2] For refusing to buy more catnip, a vengeful cat calls upon the dark arts to end an insensitive mother’s career.

...or here is a take with the focus on the Girl as the Protag (a bit long in the word-count...):

'A lonely young girl learns spell weaving from her magical cat in order to curse her career obsessed mother with backward speech as revenge for refusing to restock the cat's supply of catnip.'

Anyways -- just some ideas.

... but -- the logical question I have after spelling out your plot points is ?-- if the cat has magical abilities, why does she (the cat) require the help of a human to perform the curse..?

Hi,

I agree with what's already been stated above -- but with short films (as this one seems to be being 8 pages in length...) I think some logline rules can be fudged here and there, depending on the concept or 'hook'... but -- regardless of the film being short or feature length you need to ensure that 'hook' is clear as crystal, front- and- center, ?and as specific as you can be. Here -- I would suggest that the 'hook' is that you've got a magical cat that plots revenge against its owner..?

Below is just my spin -- I have specified that the cat is of the 'talking' variety to help with the logic:

'A magical talking cat, vexed at being denied more catnip, coerces her career obsessed owner's daughter to help curse her mother with backward speech on the day of her make-or-break presentation.'

Hope this helps and best of luck with it :)