Alex and Eve

Intrigued about the clash of cultures, but please tell me more about the story!

Who is the main character, the boy or the girl? What is her profression, strength and flaw?

What specifically stops them from being together? She's been betrothed by her parents? His minister forbid it?

What action must these lovebirds take to be together? Elope? Start a fire?

Also, is this a comedy or drama? To me, "mismatch made in heaven" makes it sound comedic... perhaps a religious take on the Odd Couple?

Patrockable, Judge

Based on a play isn't information usually found in a logline. Leave it for the poster.

I find it a little too sparse. The Romeo and Juliet like love story is clear, but what makes this story different? What separates it from the countless other stories of its kind. Without that, there's simply not enough to catch my interest enough to read the script, or watch the movie.

- Judge, Paul.

Steven Fernandez - Judge
There is nothing particularly distinctive about either the boy or girl. Sure their religious affiliations are contrasted, but we are told nothing about each person as INDIVIDUALS. You could personalise each character more by describing their key personality traits as well. For example: "a hot-tempered Greek Orthodox boy and a shrewd, entrepreneural, Moslem girl". Without these individualising touches you might as well speak about a street-sweeper and an opera singer falling in love. In fact, even that is a more interesting set up.