by janpermadi · Initiate · 40 pts
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Categories: Horror
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The order of the descriptions is wrong - he must stop it for good in order to protect his family...
I suggest you describe the possession of the father as a definitive event instead of an arbitrary one.
Here is my try:
After a father becomes possessed, his alcoholic son recruits a priest to help stop the evil spirit for good in order to save his family.
I suggest adding a conflict which makes it difficult for the son to kick the alcohol habit.
Not much to add over the above great points except, being an alcoholic isn't much of a hurdle to temporarily overcome during this event. I mean, just stop drinking until the spirit is dealt with then party on.
