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Cute.
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What's the story? What will happen if she fails to? remember it? What is her goal and what the obstacle(s) the antagonist sets in her path that she must overcome?
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I'm left questioning who the psychotic girlfriend belongs to. Is it one that followed the alien or the man's girlfriend that leaves one questioning why he has this girlfriend.
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Excellent. It clearly states the protagonist, their goal and the obstacles in their way. It definitely intrigues one to imagine the different scenarios, even comedic that can arise from the situation. One can wonder, that is what one wants the…
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Thanks.
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It already explains the plot. No 'hook' to make me interested.
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Using the word friends twice in proximity is off-putting.