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on Nearing the end of his parole and looking to put his criminal past behind him, an ex-con’s plans are derailed by the arrival of two former prison buddies, one with a bullet wound and the other with a plan to rob the local bank.

I think this is good - a lot of potential. Maybe you could get more specific than 'arrival'. What does this mean exactly? They come for a visit? To move in with him? This logline is still general enough that…
on When Tilly comes home she not only heals her ailing mother, but with her sewing machine, and haute couture style, transforms the women of the town in such a way that she gets sweet revenge on those who did her wrong. She also falls unexpectedly in love, which leads to her greatest loss and her most destructive deed.

I like the premise of the haute couture in a small town - something to work with there, but the rest is too wordy and vague. Who does she fall in love with? Destructive deed? You don't need to explain…
on Dr. Caitlin Steele is a relationship phobic, yet successful NYC sex therapist who is hired as a consultant to treat a League One London football club in the wake of recent scandals. Sparks fly when she meets team captain and womanizer, Ray Brunner, intent on bringing his club to a long awaited championship before his retirement and who wants nothing to do with an American therapist on his turf.

(Sorry, just realized I shouldn't have included their names, but I'm finding you can't edit these once they're posted, right?? ~cheers)
on A Janitor suffering from aquaphobia discovers he has the ability to control water. He must conquer his fear to save his fiance from a malevolent man who wants to see the world burn.

I think you start off with an interesting idea - a janitor with aquaphobia - but maybe you could push that a little further. Like what if he's a pool maintenance man who suddenly becomes aquaphobic? But then it gets…