Lara

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on A middle-aged woman who was estranged from her father at age ten when he was taken to prison, journeys back through his life in an attempt to piece together the puzzle of the man she never really knew.

Thanks @dpg. Great questions to ask myself. I'll work with that. Much appreciation for your input. L.
on After hospital negligence leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a mother consumed by anger risks alienating him as she struggles to let go of the boy he might have been and accept the boy he has become.

Great input @Nir Shelter and @dpg. Thank you. I'm new here, so just learning how it all works. I appreciate the tips and feedback. The mother son relationship and her evolution is really the crux of the story.. she fights…
on In order to save his life, a grief-stricken mother must simultaneously rely upon and fight the medical system that caused her son’s brain injury, all the while learning to let go of the boy he would have been and accept the boy he has become.

Ooooohhh.. getting juicier with every post! Seriously though. I'm immensely grateful for your feedback @dpg and @gilgamesh. Thank you very much. You're really helping me get clear within my process and on what matters to the story and the audience.…
on In order to save his life, a grief-stricken mother must simultaneously rely upon and fight the medical system that caused her son’s brain injury, all the while learning to let go of the boy he would have been and accept the boy he has become.

Perhaps better (or more accurate) still: "After hospital negligence leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a mother consumed by anger risks alienating him as she struggles to let go of the boy he might have been and accept the boy he…
on In order to save his life, a grief-stricken mother must simultaneously rely upon and fight the medical system that caused her son’s brain injury, all the while learning to let go of the boy he would have been and accept the boy he has become.

Perhaps better (and more accurate) still: "After hospital negligence leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a mother consumed by anger risks alienating him as she struggles to let go of the boy he might have been and accept the boy he…
on In order to save his life, a grief-stricken mother must simultaneously rely upon and fight the medical system that caused her son’s brain injury, all the while learning to let go of the boy he would have been and accept the boy he has become.

Super. Thanks again. So, if I were to say something more like.. "After hospital negligence leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a mother consumed by anger and battling addiction struggles to let go of the boy he might have been and…
on In order to save his life, a grief-stricken mother must simultaneously rely upon and fight the medical system that caused her son’s brain injury, all the while learning to let go of the boy he would have been and accept the boy he has become.

Thanks dpg. This is helpful. It actually happened in Canada, so there's less opportunity for litigation/medical malpractice, etc. How about this as an alternate and (potentially) more accurate attempt? "After a hospital error leaves her son profoundly brain-injured, a grief-stricken…