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on 3RD DRAFT…..The idyllic life of an adolescent surfer drastically changes when his family moves to pre-revolution Tehran, an American melting pot submerged in an alien culture where certain realities are but an illusion.

The idyllic life of a SoCal adolescent is upended when his family migrates to pre-revolution Tehran where his westernized coming of age conflicts with a peculiar culture and an American melting pot of illusionary realities.
on 3RD DRAFT…..The idyllic life of an adolescent surfer drastically changes when his family moves to pre-revolution Tehran, an American melting pot submerged in an alien culture where certain realities are but an illusion.

As I re-read this, I'm prompted to add a little and shift the wording around. While it gives me a better sense of direction as to where my story needs to go, I'm certain I have a longer way to…
on It’s the early 70’s, a young surfer dude is plucked from his idyllic Southern California beach existence to find himself in a foreign high school amongst a group of variously addled American expat adolescents, running fearlessly and unbridled, through the streets of pre-revolution Tehran.

The idyllic life of a SoCal adolescent is upended when his family moves to pre-revolution Tehran, where he faces coming of age struggles in an American melting pot wrapped within a foreign culture whose certain realities are but an illusion.