A contestant on the Bachelor-esque show “Token of Love” hatches a plot to win the secret million dollar prize with the help of the show’s cynical host.

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Former member · Singularity · 114,965 pts

This idea has a lot of potential for irony, satire, excitement, dark comedy and plenty of belly laughs.

I agree with Adam, I 'd love to get an extra detail about the contestant, something that puts a little more flesh to her probably well shaped, skinny and tanned bone. Doesn't necessarily need to be a sympathetic thing, could be something that enhances the comedic tone of the story.

The only thing that puzzles me is why is it the million dollar prize SECRET?

mmckean · Samurai · 690 pts

A lot of potential in this idea. I think it would be more interesting if the host tried to help them win though instead of stealing, which is what it sounds like they are planning.

Adam Bernstr?m · Samurai · 1,505 pts

Is this a fictional TV-show that only exist in your script? In that case I think you don't need to mention the title of the show in the logline.

Maybe something like this?:

A contestant on a bachelor-esque show conspire with the host to win the secret million dollar prize.

But if the protagonist is somehow cheating ? that's what it sounds like to me ? what makes us want to root for her?