A cynical sellsword joins forces with a mysterious traveler to conceal a wish-granting treasure when he learns that the King who hired him to find it will use it to become an all-powerful tyrant.

Hi Libari,

I have to admit there's a lot to digest there at first read.

Lets have a look...
INTENTION - conceal a wish-granting treasure.
OBSTACLE - the King who hired him to find it will use it to become an all-powerful tyrant.

A sellsword sets out to destroy a wish-granting treasure when he finds out his land's king will use it to become an all-powerful tryant.

- "conceal" felt soft to me. Less of a challenge. Treasure sounds dangerous and "ring-like" if he sets out to destroy it.

- wasn't sure how necessary "mysterious traveler" is to the logline.

- for less words I got rid of "cynical" as well - though it does suggest the character's potential arc. Keep it for now I imagine.

Anyways - good luck with this!

If the treasure can grant wishes, why doesn't the protagonist just wish for the death or at least the dethroning of the bad king?   Problem solved.

If the treasure can grant wishes, why doesn't the protagonist just wish for the death or at least the dethroning of the bad king? Problem solved.