A fledging actress, unlucky in love, must decide whether to risk it all or play it safe for the “happily ever after” she wants.
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Just thought I'd second dpg up there -- ending a logline with a question, IMO anyway, always reads a bit cheezily/ amateurish. The dramatic question should always be implied in the structure and content of the logline.
Also -- It's not clear what she's actually risking at the moment...
What about something like:
'After landing the part of a lifetime in Broadway, a hopelessly romantic fledgling actress puts her budding career on the line when her childhood prince charming returns home after years of missionary work overseas.'
A few words too long, and maybe nqr in terms of YOUR story, but hope it helps.
Best of luck with it.
In loglines, the dramatic question is implied, but never explicitly stated.
Your current logline seems to have two story threads, one explicit (the search for the Prince and the implied, a successful if fledgling acting career. Are these two story threads and associated goals in conflict? If they are, how?
If not, why not?
And is she "risk aversive" in her career or in romance? Or both? And if she's risk adverse only in terms of her career, how did she get to be successful actress? Acting is inherently a very risky business. Fledgling actors must cope with rejection and failure more frequently than they are likely to encounter in romance.
In loglines, the dramatic question is implied, but never explicitly stated.
Your current logline seems to have two story threads, one explicit (the search for the Prince and the implied, a successful if fledgling acting career. Are these two story threads and associated goals in conflict? If they are, how?
If not, why not?
And is she "risk aversive" in her career or in romance? Or both? And if she's risk adverse only in terms of her career, how did she get to be successful actress? Acting is inherently a very risky business. Fledgling actors must cope with rejection and failure more frequently than they are likely to encounter in romance.