A reticent young mother, grieving the death of her husband on 9 11 joins three widows who take on the U.S. government, looking for answers to the century’s most heinous crime

Thanks dpg -- I think going down the ensemble route is the right direction; but, I have been reading Kirsten Breitweiser's book on the subject -- she's an ex lawyer and I'd see her as the possible lead of the four... I'll continue to play with the logline.

Daunting, definitely -- but I think I have a good handle on the angle I would take with it... It's something that I plan on developing for awhile and want to do a bagload of research on it.

Hope you and your own writings are going well.

I think your revision contains the nut of the story. That it's a "ensemble" protagonist doesn't bother me. That's a fundamental feature of the story -- a group effort.

It's a daunting project. A big reveal, a smoking gun that would vindicate their struggle, provide a strong denouement to the story, may come out until key documents are declassified which may not be for decades. Best wishes.

I think your revision contains the nut of the story. That it's a "ensemble" protagonist doesn't bother me. That's a fundamental feature of the story -- a group effort.

It's a daunting project. A big reveal, a smoking gun that would vindicate their struggle, provide a strong denouement to the story, may come out until key documents are declassified which may not be for decades. Best wishes.