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If "...all life depends on her own survival..." has she been alive for millions of years? Is she immortal? If not, how could humanity have existed before her being born and how will humanity live after she dies?

These are just a few of the fundamental logic stumbling blocks this concept will come up against. Even if you have an answer offhand, you'll have to explain it very quickly and clearly. If a decision maker doesn't get the concept after hearing the logline and asks a follow up question, you have about 30 seconds to clarify it or else they'll think that either you don't know the answer or the concept doesn't work - either way, they'll likely pass.

I think the basic premise is too complex for its own good. And I don't mean the story is complex so as to make it interesting, I mean the actual components that make up the premise are too many and too far fetched. The result is that all these elements are now competing for importance in this concept and as we've seen from this thread, they all need too much exposition to explain the logic that connects them.

I, to, saw many similarities between your 'power' and the Star Wars 'force' and as we've seen there's a parallel between Neo in the Matrix and your MC as well. Point is, that in order to differentiate this story from others in its genre, you've added complications and elements - which is good, but they're simply not working in its current form - which is bad.

I can't make any useful suggestions at this stage as I'de need to invent too much from scratch for that to work. To help you we need to know what in the story makes it work for you.
What is it about this character, premise or plot that attracts you the most to this concept as a whole?

>>>?It is not until the very last minute that Neo proactively does something, fighting an agent.

That is his final exam, the Obligatory Scene, the High Noon showdown the movie has been building to.

Neo has been developing his power not as end in itself, but as a means to achieve a greater goal.? His objective goal to liberate humanity from computers.? ?Actually, to be really precise, Neo's objective goal is to prove (to himself) that he is the prophesied "One" who will deliver humanity from computers.

Whatever.??Training, defeating foes are the means to? obtain the ultimate objective goal of the plot? -- not the objective? goal itself.?? In a logline, the objective goal should be framed as proactive and positive.? (Semantically,? there many be no difference between:? "My goal is to defeat my opponent on the tennis court" and "My goal is to win on the tennis court".? But when it comes to pitching, to selling, framing a goal positively is better.? The efficacy of affirmation in contrast to negation.)

>>>?It is not until the very last minute that Neo proactively does something, fighting an agent.

That is his final exam, the Obligatory Scene, the High Noon showdown the movie has been building to.

Neo has been developing his power not as end in itself, but as a means to achieve a greater goal.? His objective goal to liberate humanity from computers.? ?Actually, to be really precise, Neo's objective goal is to prove (to himself) that he is the prophesied "One" who will deliver humanity from computers.

Whatever.??Training, defeating foes are the means to? obtain the ultimate objective goal of the plot? -- not the objective? goal itself.?? In a logline, the objective goal should be framed as proactive and positive.? (Semantically,? there many be no difference between:? "My goal is to defeat my opponent on the tennis court" and "My goal is to win on the tennis court".? But when it comes to pitching, to selling, framing a goal positively is better.? The efficacy of affirmation in contrast to negation.)