After his girl disappears, a vacationing underachiever must interfere in the last heist of a ruthless ageing crook hell-bent on capturing the girl he needs to finish the job.

Many moving parts in this logline but, as Moses99 said, few make sense.

No need to mention vacation. Better to choose a different character description - characters with?no real goals in life are n inspiring and will likely bore an audience. If you want to imply that he learns to value goals, make him depressed or scared.

Lastly describe in detail what he MUST achieve - kill the crook, have him arrested or save the girl and run. What ever it is it needs to be mentioned.

For me, the fingerprint is the hook, what sort of differentiates the story. ? It's the gimmick for the heist. ?It explains why he needs the stakes character, the girl. ?(Otherwise, that element of the logline doesn't make sense, seems extraneous.)

So yeah, I think it needs to be in the logline.

For me, the fingerprint is the hook, what sort of differentiates the story. ? It's the gimmick for the heist. ?It explains why he needs the stakes character, the girl. ?(Otherwise, that element of the logline doesn't make sense, seems extraneous.)

So yeah, I think it needs to be in the logline.