After witnessing a god rape her sister, a naive nymph seeks revenge, risking her life in the process.

I want to echo what dpg said. The lead character who seeks revenge should be the victim. ?Sort of, "I spit on your grave" Meets "God of war" (The video game)

Agree with Richiev and FFF.

And "risking her life in the process" goes without needing to say so. ?That's always the implied stakes, especially when a character takes on a god.

And what about the rape victim? ?Why can't she be the one who seeks revenge? ?After, she's the one who has suffered the more, who has the stronger motivation.

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Agree with Richiev and FFF.

And "risking her life in the process" goes without needing to say so. ?That's always the implied stakes, especially when a character takes on a god.

And what about the rape victim? ?Why can't she be the one who seeks revenge? ?After, she's the one who has suffered the more, who has the stronger motivation.

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Great start! But it feels a little vague. What kind of god? Does the nymph have any faults that must be overcome. How is she going to risk her life?

I agree with the previous comments.
Anyway, it's a good concept - be sure to read a lot of greek myths, that would help you create a story which is new and ancient at?the same time.

I agree with the above review.? You have your main character and an inciting incident and an end goal. But the logline needs further information on how she plans to achieve that goal.

In the text - could also cut out "in the process".? E.g. ".... risking her life and virtue by descending into Hades, battling demons... " or maybe even cut out "risking her life" if it is evident that this is what is happening.

Just my 2c worth. Hope it helps.