An uptight business man races against the clock to find a way out of purgatory or risks to lose his life.

Foxtrot 25's rewrite is definitely an improvement.

My tweak: ?When an overworked Grim Reaper mistakenly sends an overworked business man...

Play on the parallel irony. ?The ?Grim Reaper uses the same excuse to neglect remedying the business man's predicament, as the business man does in neglecting a predicament he has created for his family. ?What goes around comes around.

Foxtrot 25's rewrite is definitely an improvement.

My tweak: ?When an overworked Grim Reaper mistakenly sends an overworked business man...

Play on the parallel irony. ?The ?Grim Reaper uses the same excuse to neglect remedying the business man's predicament, as the business man does in neglecting a predicament he has created for his family. ?What goes around comes around.

This:?An uptight business man that neglects his family

just doesn't go well with this:?winds up in the land of the dead and must find a way out or risks losing his life.

What does 1 have to do with the other?

A busy Grim Reaper mistakenly sends a overworked ?business man to the land of the dead where he must find a way out and back to his family before a portal seals forever.