During an unruly blizzard, a family is trapped in their house with a malevolent ghost who has their daughter, and given the choice – get out and live or look for their daughter and die.

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lempicka · Logliner · 405 pts

I'm not sure if the blizzard is a red herring here. And why would they choose to look for their daughter if they're going to die, as what would then happen to the daughter? Could you set up a different dilemma that pits them against the ghost?

thedarkhorse · Mentor · 3,495 pts

Hi Richiev,

Yeah, admittedly this one is still muddled.

I wanted this demonic ghost to actually give them the choice for the freedom. But yeah - I'm not sure if it's the dilemma I'm looking for. Of course they're gonna stay - it's not a hard dilemma.

The blizzard is going to be there - I'm just not sure if it should be part of the logline.

I'll work on this and hopefully have something tomorrow.

I'm thinking of this:

During an unruly blizzard, a family is trapped in their house with the malevolent ghost of a serial killer - and a man from the father's secret past.

Again - there's no hook here or dilemma. Nothing that sets it apart.