Revised: After her children are taken, on account of her mental illness, a holier-than-though mother must reclaim them, by undergoing a life-threatening VR therapy: defeating embodiments of her demons in simulated combat.
Categories: SciFi
6 reviews
You need to decide what is the better goal, getting the kids back or curing herself. Richiev's version, in my mind, is stronger as it gives her a clear objective goal we can see her achieve without the need for exposition.
Her kids being taken away from her is a very powerful image and one that would clearly motivate her, a positive diagnosis less so.
>>>on account of her mental illness, a holier-than-though mother
What dramatic purpose is served by her being "holier-than-thou"?? She's already mentally ill.? Isn't that enough?
>>>on account of her mental illness, a holier-than-though mother
What dramatic purpose is served by her being "holier-than-thou"?? She's already mentally ill.? Isn't that enough?