Revision: Trapped into a lease with his ex-wife, a depressed writer must navigate the intricacies of single life, but when he falls for his married boss, life gets so much more complicated.
Categories: Comedy
5 reviews
Like your last attempt, the premise is interesting. However, after the set-up of being stuck in a lease with his ex-wife, the rest of your story goes off in a different direction.
You have such a strong setup, the story should be about being stuck in a lease with his ex-wife. That's your hook.
The logline gives the protagonist a problem and a major complication but it fails to give him a dramatic objective goal.
Given the problem, given the complication what must he do?? What becomes his objective goal?
The logline gives the protagonist a problem and a major complication but it fails to give him a dramatic objective goal.
Given the problem, given the complication what must he do?? What becomes his objective goal?