I sent out a pitch to two seperate production companies. Both passed on it. I need help writing one that will work.

Ian, is there anything else that I need to do with my pitch?

I added the rewrites you suggested.

You can read my script on scriptbuddy.com.

http://en.wikipedia.org/wiki/Titanic_(disambiguation)

I am going to make the adjustments as soon as I can. That part about Liam being the ine who came up with the Submarine gave me another "what if" idea. Thanks.

Just wanted to say, that Valentin -- that took some time and effort...serious hats-off. Way beyond the usual expectations of contributors here.

Presario2200 -- Valentin gives sage advice, particularly in terms of reading screenplays, and the more like the genre(s) you want to work in the better. Look for what works... And particularly for what doesn't; then, apply that to your own work.

Read, read, and read some more.

Best of luck.

The reason why it is called the "Titanic" is because it is the world's biggest submarine at 1,601 ft. long and 13 decks.