To add some spice to mundane life a wedding photographer and his childhood friend set about organizing a show of local rock bands that were famous in the 1990s and make a documentary about them. Will the two friends manage to find their true calling in life when everything goes wrong?

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Neer Shelter · Singularity · 39,985 pts

As previously mentioned stakes and clear objectives are needed.

Additionally if this is a farce comedy then the premise could work so long as a need in the character's world is established the story would also require sufficient and well structured sub plots to work for an entire film. A good example of a similar premise that executed farce well is Wane's World 2.

With regards to the logline itself I would say that asking a question at the end in my mind normally weakens a logline. A good logline should describe a set of characters and obstacle and a need in such a way that a question is naturally formed in the mind of the reader with no need for a direct prompt from the logline itself. The effect of this is intrigue for the reader so when you ask the reader a question instead this effect is diluted.

Hope this helps.

dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

As Richiev said. The logline needs spicing up with the elements he suggested.