When Aliter, an odd hawk with an overbearing family, leaves his home in a fit of rage, he will have to discover what it means to be truly free if he is to survive on his own.

What is the event that causes him to leave home?

What does he have to do out in the "real world"? Survival is at stake ... but why? What is trying to kill him? (Could be a great movie if it's simply - I'm assuming animated - about a hawk who leaves home and encounters a hunter, and the battle between them? Essentially a Pixar-esque version of Duel? Stakes get raised at the midpoint when one of his family members becomes a target of the hunter as well?)

Hi,

looks like you're heading in the right direction already but I thought I'd add one more comment. It sounds as if 'odd' might mean he's gentle or a vegetarian. Why not say that in the logline? The reader might find it fun or interesting to see that juxtaposition - a hawk who doesn't like to hunt prey, or a hawk who only wants to eat veggies. Whereas 'odd' could mean anything.

good luck

Good luck finding a focus for what he stands for, what he really wants to do. The movie "Ratatouille" comes to mind. Remy the rat has a passionate, positive desire that sets him apart, in conflict with his family, his species: he appreciates good food (value). Not just to eat it, but to cook it (ambition). And so, when he finds himself in Paris he takes advantage of the situation to cook at one of its best restaurants (goal).

I'm not sure exactly. I was thinking perhaps he would have been friends with some prey animal when he was young or some prey animal could have saved his life earlier. I don't think I want him to be 'black and white' labeled as a pacifist per say but I think to some degree he would be ever since that early childhood moment even with the conflict going on inside of him. Also I don't plan on this being a comedy, but more of an adventure.

What does he stand for?

Is he a pacifist? A vegan? An animal rights activist? Knowing the inciting incident opens up all kinds of interesting possibilities in my mind, particularly if you're writing a comedy.

I really like your suggestion. I think that really sums up what's going on. Thanks!