When an overprotected teenager? falls in love with an older rock-climber with trust problems, she convinces him to help her climb the dangerous “Watcher Crack” – but halfway up the wall they witness a murder and find themselves the target of a homicidal maniac desperate to cover his tracks.

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Former member · Singularity · 114,965 pts

Freewill:

Re: A naive teen and her more-experienced partner witness a murder half-way through a remote rock-climb, and find themselves the target of the killer trying to cover his tracks

I have no particular problem with this version in terms of the issue of unity and singularity of plot.

I do have a question about the logline seeming to cast dual protagonists.? Who owns the story?? Who is your point of view character?? Who has the strongest arc?? Is the plot really about the relationship between the teen and the experienced climber?? Or...?

(FWIW: I favor framing the logline with the teen as the protagonist, the pov character, because then the film is more marketable: it can be promoted targeting the teenage/young adult demographic -- the most desired and lucrative group.)

I am aware of but haven't (yet) seen "The River Wild".? Reading the plot summary at IMDB, it seems that Meryl Streep's character is the protagonist because she's the experienced guide, the one with the skill and knowledge to steer the raft.? And I'm guessing she's the point of view character.

That is my provisional answer.? I've added it to my viewing queue.?? As is my practice, after I viewing a picture, I? will write my version of a logline? for it.

dogger · Singularity · 87,055 pts

Freewill:

Re: A naive teen and her more-experienced partner witness a murder half-way through a remote rock-climb, and find themselves the target of the killer trying to cover his tracks

I have no particular problem with this version in terms of the issue of unity and singularity of plot.

I do have a question about the logline seeming to cast dual protagonists.? Who owns the story?? Who is your point of view character?? Who has the strongest arc?? Is the plot really about the relationship between the teen and the experienced climber?? Or...?

(FWIW: I favor framing the logline with the teen as the protagonist, the pov character, because then the film is more marketable: it can be promoted targeting the teenage/young adult demographic -- the most desired and lucrative group.)

I am aware of but haven't (yet) seen "The River Wild".? Reading the plot summary at IMDB, it seems that Meryl Streep's character is the protagonist because she's the experienced guide, the one with the skill and knowledge to steer the raft.? And I'm guessing she's the point of view character.

That is my provisional answer.? I've added it to my viewing queue.?? As is my practice, after I viewing a picture, I? will write my version of a logline? for it.

RedRoad · Penpusher · 100 pts

In my view, a logline is a condensed plot. So, it helps to have a basic idea of your plot or story and then identify core elements i.e inciting incident, conflict, etc. for your logline.

If you try and start off thinking about a hooky logline then that's merely an exercise in marketing rather than screenwriting. I'm pretty sure the studios have A.I that can do this a lot better than any human since the A.I has a database filled with the best movie loglines matched to demographics and box office returns.

Also, it helps if the story is somewhat personal and actually? means something to you because you are going to be living with this story for a very long time if you decide to write a screenplay.