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When their Uncle is murdered by the Irish Mafia because of their dead father's debt, an honest citizen joins his teenage brother to take their revenge. They must fight against mobsters and the corrupt policemen who control the streets of Boston to ultimately dismantle the oldest crime group in the United States or die trying.
Hi....This is to much information for a Logline. try switching the order around so the Logline is clearer. When a violent gangland killing erupts a grieving father and samaritan must smash the prevailing group or witness the death of their entire family. Keep it down to 21 or 25 words at most.
Hi….This is to much information for a Logline.
try switching the order around so the Logline is clearer.
When a violent gangland killing erupts a grieving father and samaritan must smash the prevailing group or witness the death of their entire family.
Keep it down to 21 or 25 words at most.
See lessA solitary man unable to sleep for 15 years survives by recording everything he sees and playing it back to differentiate between reality and hallucinations, until he becomes the only witness of a multi million dollar crime and every single person wants to alter his reality.
I tried to shorten the premise with......When a grieving husband has a stroke he awakens to discover his desire for revenge has become reality. Best of Luck ;)
I tried to shorten the premise with……When a grieving husband has a stroke he awakens to discover his desire for revenge has become reality.
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A solitary man unable to sleep for 15 years survives by recording everything he sees and playing it back to differentiate between reality and hallucinations, until he becomes the only witness of a multi million dollar crime and every single person wants to alter his reality.
I Applaud your efforts at a High Concept .....Inception type premise. However i think as DPG Says it is important to know the distinction and specific rules of the Story. Know the World of the story before writing the Story. Seems to complex. Needs to be clearer. Goodluck :) Bear in mind it is easyRead more
I Applaud your efforts at a High Concept …..Inception type premise.
However i think as DPG Says it is important to know the distinction and specific rules of the Story.
Know the World of the story before writing the Story.
Seems to complex.
Needs to be clearer.
Goodluck 🙂
Bear in mind it is easy to fault peoples efforts but to post log lines is a learning , sculpting and refining process necessary to learn the importance of the Structure.
No Guts No Glory.
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