Have an account? Sign In Now
Lost your password? Please enter your email address. You will receive a link and will create a new password via email.
Please briefly explain why you feel this question should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this answer should be reported.
Please briefly explain why you feel this user should be reported.
When Asian vampires steal an ancient demon?s mask, a museum curator and a bus driver must stop them from bringing the monster back to life.
The Bus Driver supplies the free transportation.......... These M C'S Need to have a specific Purpose.......Otherwise it is to on the nose.....Ie Obvious. How does a Curator prevent a Mask coming back to life. Follow the 5 Logliner steps of Structure.
The Bus Driver supplies the free transportation……….
These M C’S Need to have a specific Purpose…….Otherwise it is to on the nose…..Ie Obvious.
How does a Curator prevent a Mask coming back to life.
Follow the 5 Logliner steps of Structure.
See lessWith crime running rampant in Los Angeles, a rookie DA begins receiving unsolicited advice from the ghost a of a once famed long dead prosecutor, era's clash as they fight to bring justice to the southland.
The Event would be.........When the crime rate explodes across Los Angeles. The Goal is unclear. The Premise is a bit vague......Era's clash. I like the mentor is he a shape changer also being the antagonist......That could be good. Use words sparingly Because you need to hit the 5 Point Logliners CRead more
The Event would be………When the crime rate explodes across Los Angeles.
The Goal is unclear.
The Premise is a bit vague……Era’s clash.
I like the mentor is he a shape changer also being the antagonist……That could be good.
Use words sparingly Because you need to hit the 5 Point Logliners Code.
Try when
A struggling rookie D A starts winning cases with the help of a former dead judge he becomes a willing subject, but when it is revealed that the devil is manipulating history he must win his most important case.
A greater threat with a High Concept attached to a more personal Goal.
See lessHope this broadens your scope.
After he?s mislead and rejected by a straight guy, a frustrated, angry, gay man struggles to regain his personal power by trying to control, bed and degrade a straight hustler with a dangerous drug addiction.
Hey man i think you are using to many words..remember to try and stay under 21 ..........What is the protags goal it needs to be something stronger......Why is this important now...........The insighting incident needs to be a event......................AA SMITH 5 Things your Protagonist can't surviRead more
Hey man i think you are using to many words..remember to try and stay under 21 ……….What is the protags goal it needs to be something stronger……Why is this important now………..The insighting incident needs to be a event………………….AA SMITH 5 Things your Protagonist can’t survive without…..FUNCTION, WEAKNESS,INSIGHTING INCIDENT, GOAL AND STAKES……….
See less