1. Posted: July 6, 2013In:

    In the near future, a manipulative drug addict is deceived into a subconscious form of intervention–by the people who care about him the most.

    almiiitey Penpusher

    Your idea sounds very interesting. If the drug addict is your main character, his actions need to drive the story. What action does he take in response to this situation?

    Your idea sounds very interesting. If the drug addict is your main character, his actions need to drive the story. What action does he take in response to this situation?

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  2. Posted: May 20, 2013In:

    A murdered chess champion challenges heaven to save her brother from becoming her killer?s next victim.

    almiiitey Penpusher

    Thanks for your feedback Jean-Marie Mazaleyrat. The hero is still the same and the story is essentially the same; however, the wording seemed to get better feedback on Logline.it. The story is still evolving so any comments you have to share would be very valuable.

    Thanks for your feedback Jean-Marie Mazaleyrat. The hero is still the same and the story is essentially the same; however, the wording seemed to get better feedback on Logline.it. The story is still evolving so any comments you have to share would be very valuable.

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  3. Posted: May 20, 2013In:

    A murdered chess champion challenges heaven to save her brother from becoming her killer?s next victim.

    almiiitey Penpusher

    Thanks so much for offering to read the original logline. Here it is: A murdered teenage girl sacrifices eternity to return as a ghost and protect her brother from becoming her killer?s next victim. Looking forward to your comments.

    Thanks so much for offering to read the original logline. Here it is:

    A murdered teenage girl sacrifices eternity to return as a ghost and protect her brother from becoming her killer?s next victim.

    Looking forward to your comments.

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