1. Posted: July 1, 2013In:

    After he finds out his ex-girlfriend is getting married, a man decides to go to the wedding in order to stop her from going through with it.

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    Cameron, why is it so important that the man stop the ex-girlfriend from getting married? Is he still in love with her? This log-line strikes me as something that could happen in a single scene - I'm not really sure there is a story here. Does the man have a flaw/flaws?

    Cameron, why is it so important that the man stop the ex-girlfriend from getting married? Is he still in love with her? This log-line strikes me as something that could happen in a single scene – I’m not really sure there is a story here. Does the man have a flaw/flaws?

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  2. Posted: February 26, 2013In:

    When an arrogant, big-shot Hollywood Producer fails at murdering a big-shot actor, he must hunt down the star before the news gets out and ruins his career.

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    Hi Richiev, Thanks for the feedback. The Producers motivation is to kill the actor to boost sales of the upcoming release of the film. His family has been kidnapped by the mob due to his massive debts and no bank in Hollywood will lend him any more money. He doesn't want to involve the police as theRead more

    Hi Richiev,

    Thanks for the feedback.

    The Producers motivation is to kill the actor to boost sales of the upcoming release of the film. His family has been kidnapped by the mob due to his massive debts and no bank in Hollywood will lend him any more money. He doesn’t want to involve the police as the mob have threatened to kill his family the moment police get involved and he believes them. He’s in so much monetary trouble that the only way to pay the mob off is to get the extra profit percentage from the film that he’s produced and is about to be released.

    I’ve reworked this so you’re on the Producer’s side…

    When an arrogant Hollywood Producer’s family is kidnapped by the mob due to his overwhelming debts, he has only a week to get the money if he is ever to see his family again.

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  3. Posted: February 26, 2013In:

    After an accident causes a successful CEO to lose both legs, he is forced to re-evaluate his life and identity

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    I agree with this, we need to know what the process of re-evaluation is because that seems to be the core of the story - at the same time I think we need to know what the stakes are - So what if he doesn't re-evaluate his life or identity? Does this mean the entire company will fall apart and the otRead more

    I agree with this, we need to know what the process of re-evaluation is because that seems to be the core of the story – at the same time I think we need to know what the stakes are – So what if he doesn’t re-evaluate his life or identity? Does this mean the entire company will fall apart and the other company stake holders kick him off the executive board?

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