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When a foster care teen learns of his biological father’s death, he must undergo a mystic rite of passage to claim his inheritance. (23)
Okay, how about this scenario: A teen and his mother and her second husband. The teen has been raised to be extroverted, a socially adept member of society. But he is an introvert and secretly yearns for something more, something he doesn't understand himself because he has been conditioned by socieRead more
Okay, how about this scenario:
A teen and his mother and her second husband. The teen has been raised to be extroverted, a socially adept member of society. But he is an introvert and secretly yearns for something more, something he doesn’t understand himself because he has been conditioned by society.
Then when his real father dies, a man his mother hated and never wanted him to be like, and he learns of his inheritance, a staggering amount that will allow him to do nothing for the rest of his life, his mother wants nothing to do with it.
So, his mother will try and prevent him from going on the Rite of Passage.
But at the start of Act 2 he decides to do it and goes with his father’s attorney to the farm where the Rite is to take place.
Meanwhile, his mother is furious and calls the cops.
On the farm the boy is told about the Rite, a Rite his father rediscovered, and how it will transform the way he sees the world. The Rite is then initiated and “The Blackening” phase of the transformation begins. The evil dwarf-like creature appears and begins to torment the boy.
to be continued.
I’m sucking this out of my thumb now. Need to think it through a bit more.
Please advise.
See lessAfter being revived from a near drowning, a conservative Christian teen must endure being tormented by an evil dwarf-like creature when his mother doesn’t believe him. (26)
God allowed Satan to torment Job. Yes. As God allowed the evil dwarf like creature to torment my protagonist. Job was a good man. He had no flaw. Or did he? I don't think he did. Neither does my protagonist. He's just a normal teen, who after an accident starts being tormented by "the devil" ... andRead more
God allowed Satan to torment Job. Yes. As God allowed the evil dwarf like creature to torment my protagonist.
Job was a good man. He had no flaw. Or did he? I don’t think he did.
Neither does my protagonist. He’s just a normal teen, who after an accident starts being tormented by “the devil” … and nobody believes him. Nobody helps him. He just … endures it until finally he can’t take it anymore and surrenders to it. And by surrendering himself to it, he discovers what I think Job discovered … a way to communicate, to converse with whatever it is that we call God.
That is why the “flawless” Job was made to suffer. By human standards he was without flaw. But in the eyes of God there was still one thing he had to learn, and at the end of his story he learns it, he finally knows without a doubt in his mind that The Kingdom of God is in this world but men do not see it.
Job saw it. And my protagonist sees it.
How do I write a logline for a protagonist whose only real flaw is that he had an accident that changed his perception of reality?
Thanks for your reply dpg. You’re forcing me to think differently. I get stuck in my thinking quite often.
See lessAfter being revived from a near drowning, a conservative Christian teen must endure being tormented by an evil dwarf-like creature when his mother doesn’t believe him. (26)
Thanks again guys. Im working on a new logline now. The core idea is the same. Its always been the same. Ive just been trying to find the right vehicle for it. Ive come up with so many story ideas from just this one idea. The sad thing is I havent been able to make any of them work to my satisfactioRead more
Thanks again guys.
Im working on a new logline now. The core idea is the same. Its always been the same. Ive just been trying to find the right vehicle for it. Ive come up with so many story ideas from just this one idea. The sad thing is I havent been able to make any of them work to my satisfaction. The logline in this post is the basic idea.
The questions that I added to try and clarify the pitch are also a part of the main idea. Ive given up on it so many times but I always end up coming back to it. And then, I go off into a different world trying to make the same core idea function there. And most of the times it doesnt because the main action, the pro-action, isnt there because the action is SUFFERING and how suffering has the power to change a man, transform a man, into something that will never be the same again.
Thats why my stories always fall flat. Because theyre almost always about a guy who does nothing but suffer until, in the end, a complete surrender leads to the final epiphany …
And nobody really wants that, or that just doesnt work in the movies. I dont know.
Anyway, just wanted to say that Ill keep on trying and that I like it here.
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