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  1. Posted: February 23, 2018In: Drama

    An outcast elephant who prefers to keep to himself becomes an unlikely hero when he unintentionally prevents a tragedy from occurring, but now he must learn how to become a leader.

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    Added an answer on February 23, 2018 at 12:32 pm

    I like the premise. I'm not sure you need to keep "who prefers to keep to himself." I'd love to hear more about this.? You have it marked as a drama, but I would think Family.

    I like the premise.
    I’m not sure you need to keep “who prefers to keep to himself.”

    I’d love to hear more about this.? You have it marked as a drama, but I would think Family.

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  2. Posted: February 23, 2018In: Drama

    Fueled by an encounter with a haunted house, a novice paranormal investigator battles the supernatural for those with nowhere else to turn with her reluctant best friend.

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    Added an answer on February 23, 2018 at 5:05 am

    You were so close to having me hooked! And then you finished with "with her reluctant best friend."

    You were so close to having me hooked! And then you finished with “with her reluctant best friend.”

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  3. Posted: June 19, 2016In: Fantasy

    After trapping himself in an alternate universe, a Mage and his split consciousness must commune with the common realm to defeat the dark forces that threaten their existence.

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    Added an answer on June 24, 2016 at 5:42 am

    Thank you for continuing on with this discussion, guys. It makes me think I really have something potentially great here. Hopefully I can meet that expectation You're both right. I need to tie in the "split consciousness" to the logline so it's more than just intriguing, but integral. In a sense, DkRead more

    Thank you for continuing on with this discussion, guys. It makes me think I really have something potentially great here. Hopefully I can meet that expectation

    You’re both right. I need to tie in the “split consciousness” to the logline so it’s more than just intriguing, but integral.

    In a sense, Dkpough1, his split consciousness is, all three. You might compare it to being a young clone of himself (a character). He needs to raise (a goal) and train it to be just as or more powerful as/than he is (tool).
    Keep in mind, this is separate from the pupil in the common realm. He has to train them both, then they have to use their combined powers to open a portal that would release him from this alternate realm.
    Now, I didn’t list this, because it gets complicated, but one of the primary obstacles is that the Mage and the alternate realm that they are in is tied to an artifact in the common realm. As long as they are within proximity to each other, their powers increase, and, as well, they can communicate more easily.
    Back to the [clone]…just like with the artifact, their individual powers increase when they are in proximity to each other.

    One common obstacle to be expected is frustration with the training, causing one or more to walk away. This would weaken the powers of each character, leaving each to work on their own, with their limited powers, to defeat their individual obstacles and villains.

    I’m a bit frazzled with other things right now, so I’m not thinking clear enough to write up a satisfactory draft. I’ll return to this when I get a chance.

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