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When her son is kidnapped, the distraught mother must beg her tight-fisted father-in-law, J. Paul Getty, the world?s richest man, to pay the ransom.
"After her son's kidnapping, a broke/distraught divorcee must persuade her ultra rich father-in-law to pay a ransom of $17 million"I squeezed in 'divorcee' & that ginormous ransom, to give us why he would be reluctant to pay. If I could fit in 'the world's richest man', I would.Secondly, I meantRead more
“After her son’s kidnapping, a broke/distraught divorcee must persuade her ultra rich father-in-law to pay a ransom of $17 million”
I squeezed in ‘divorcee‘ & that ginormous ransom, to give us why he would be reluctant to pay. If I could fit in ‘the world’s richest man‘, I would.
Secondly, I meant ‘not mentioning based on a true story of…‘; mentioning his name isn’t an issue, but expecting everybody to know it, is. Because he might be rich and famous, but a commoner doesn’t know him; invoking that could be tough…
See lessI switched ‘beg’ with ‘persuade’ because as dramatic her goal is, she can’t stop at ‘begging’ if it fails (I don’t know what she did in the film, so take my word with a grain of salt)
When her son is kidnapped, the distraught mother must beg her tight-fisted father-in-law, J. Paul Getty, the world?s richest man, to pay the ransom.
Sounds like kurosawa's 'high and low' (1963) I have yet to see this film but 'to beg her father-in-law' doesn't seem like an act which can sustain an entire feature film... Hooking it still is! It needs to clear up why he wouldn't pay when he can afford it (being the richest man, however tight fisteRead more
Sounds like kurosawa’s ‘high and low’ (1963)
See lessI have yet to see this film but ‘to beg her father-in-law’ doesn’t seem like an act which can sustain an entire feature film… Hooking it still is!
It needs to clear up why he wouldn’t pay when he can afford it (being the richest man, however tight fisted he might be)
It should be ‘..A distraught mother’ instead of ‘..HIS distraught mother’
When ruthless alien killers with chameleon abilities escape to Earth, an elite, combat security officer must kill or recapture them before they slaughter the humans that get in their way
Kindly avoid reposting your loglineYou'll find an 'edit' button below it,ThanksAbout this version...'Senior security officer' is an improvement over an 'Assassin', Nir Shelter was right about selectively adapting for cinema. Now protagonist has got the ?dramatic need? to pursue the prisoners.What diRead more
Kindly avoid reposting your logline
You’ll find an ‘edit’ button below it,
Thanks
About this version…
‘Senior security officer’ is an improvement over an ‘Assassin’, Nir Shelter was right about selectively adapting for cinema. Now protagonist has got the ?dramatic need? to pursue the prisoners.
What did you mean by ‘ship’s future attack plans’?? If?it’s directed towards my planet, I wouldn’t watch it under Sci-fi (comedy maybe..)? If not Earth, then that needs to be cleared up.
These ?plans? could develop into a strong hook (as wisely suggested by dpg) You might raise stakes for the officer (make it more personal for him) with an unrevealable mcguffin the prisoners ran away with, which if exposed to an earthling would? (do something hooking, like make humans ?superhuman? by its exposure and a slave to the prisoners ? hence the urgency ? since killing a human isn’t allowed by the intergalactic laws {after Valentin’s suggestion})
Good Luck JC!!
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