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  1. Posted: April 7, 2018In: Family

    Revised: After a magical species abducts their parents, to transform them into their evil emperors, their twins must find and rescue them in time.

    variable Uberwriter
    Added an answer on April 8, 2018 at 10:07 pm

    Save 8 words with a small tweak... After an evil specie abducts their parents, the twins must rescue them before they are mutated & brainwashed as their dark emperors Q. why did i merge ?teenager and her twin? into ?the twins?? A. because it?s essentially the same, isn?t it? Q. why I kept it sepRead more

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    After an evil specie abducts their parents, the twins must rescue them before they are mutated & brainwashed as their dark emperors

    Q. why did i merge ?teenager and her twin? into ?the twins??
    A. because it?s essentially the same, isn?t it?
    Q. why I kept it seperate before in ?a defiant teenager with her nerd twin?
    A. because they made an unusual team (the bold and the brain) which can be a hook in kid?s film

    Two protagonists would work better in your film since young audience will get bored watching a single kid roaming alone in vast space…
    That being said, one of them should be the main protagonist,
    I used “a defiant teenager with her nerdy twin” before, to exploit events such as “when the nerd kid needs saving by his-2 minute elder-sister” (my elder sister saved my wimpy a** many times lol) and it could be a running joke “i am elder, listen to me dave!”
    it’s just one lousy version. Use those twins that offer the most interesting plot.
    good luck with your project!

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  2. Posted: April 8, 2018In: Comedy

    When a teenager shows up engaged, his possessive single mother fakes her love for his fianc?’s single dad, to foil their premature marriage

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    Added an answer on April 8, 2018 at 2:50 pm

    or After her teenager shows up engaged, his possessive single mother teams up with the fianc??s single dad, to foil their premature marriage

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    After her teenager shows up engaged, his possessive single mother teams up with the fianc??s single dad, to foil their premature marriage

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  3. Posted: April 7, 2018In: SciFi

    A crew of escaped prisoners crash into a relay station over Jupiter carrying evidence of torture and murder. They must fight their way to the communication room to tell earth of these corporate crimes before the outpost burns.

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    Added an answer on April 8, 2018 at 1:55 pm

    When their outpost is in the verge of boom boom boom, their immediate goal "to tell earth of these corporate crimes" seems selfish...

    When their outpost is in the verge of boom boom boom, their immediate goal “to tell earth of these corporate crimes” seems selfish…

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