1. Posted: August 19, 2016In:

    The story follows group of friends,each with different idealism and with love for wrong person,as they begin suspecting some of them actually killed their friend who died in an accident.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    We need to know number of friends and an event. Think of the Big Chill. Based on that. Four friends come together for a funeral only to start blaming each other for course their friends death. Now describe the friends 1) war veterans 2) college friends You get the picture.

    We need to know number of friends and an event. Think of the Big Chill. Based on that.

    Four friends come together for a funeral only to start blaming each other for course their friends death.

    Now describe the friends

    1) war veterans
    2) college friends

    You get the picture.

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  2. Posted: August 18, 2016In:

    A young man cursed by the blood of pirates that flows within him , promises his dying sister to find the famous treasure left by his father ”The lord of the oceans”.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    It would be too long to do this. ?If you added "but..." To the end, that would be where your logline would really start. A young man takes to the sea to recover his pirate father's treasure, but ....... What prevents him from just getting the treasure and how does he defeat it?

    It would be too long to do this. ?If you added “but…” To the end, that would be where your logline would really start.

    A young man takes to the sea to recover his pirate father’s treasure, but …….

    What prevents him from just getting the treasure and how does he defeat it?

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  3. Posted: August 18, 2016In:

    An intelligent but unsuccessful father must save his kids from terrorist who think that he is a Superhero.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    Is it better to describe him rather than his career. ?A poor career doesn't in my opinion inform us of his character. ?Why does he fail as a business person, state that. A fearful, non confrontational man..... Scared and indecisive....

    Is it better to describe him rather than his career. ?A poor career doesn’t in my opinion inform us of his character. ?Why does he fail as a business person, state that.

    A fearful, non confrontational man…..

    Scared and indecisive….

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