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When his mentor, a terrorist in disguise set’s him up with a bomb in a train terror attack, a Norwegian dropout, must evacuate the potential victims which will be killed in his name before the bomb kills them all.
Not sure there is enough dramatic fuel in the tank. Just find better adjectives and trim some stuff. ?If you drop the nationality it gives it more pace, plus it doesn't change the story. ? Plus is there more for him to do. ?Is there two hours of story evacuating people. ?What is getting in his way?Read more
Not sure there is enough dramatic fuel in the tank. Just find better adjectives and trim some stuff. ?If you drop the nationality it gives it more pace, plus it doesn’t change the story. ? Plus is there more for him to do. ?Is there two hours of story evacuating people. ?What is getting in his way?
A student must evacuate an entire train after discovering his meant has hidden a bomb in his luggage.
Now add favour and detail builds story.
A student must evacuate an entire train after learning he has been framed for a future terrorist by his mentor that has hidden a bomb in his luggage.
i hope this helps.
See lessAfter his older brother’s unexpected death, a sheltered but bold young teen living on his traditional family’s farm craves independence elsewhere, but his freedom is threatened when he is pronounced the next heir to the farm.
My question is so what happens and what does he do? ?Threat can be answered in a few sentences. ?He sells the farm and moves to Holland. ? So how does the threat come about? ?Why is getting a farm a threat to freedom? This is probably not the story but a take on it from what I can see. "Inheriting tRead more
My question is so what happens and what does he do? ?Threat can be answered in a few sentences. ?He sells the farm and moves to Holland. ? So how does the threat come about? ?Why is getting a farm a threat to freedom?
This is probably not the story but a take on it from what I can see.
“Inheriting the family farm a young man must decide to go home and run it and provide for his mum or sell it and chance his big city law career”. ?Even this lacks dramatic options.
“Going home to sell the farm he inherited a young man torn between staying and running the family ensure his mum’s future or selling it and using the money to chase his dreams in the big city”.
Give your MC some action. ?Tell us about what he will be doing what his dreams and wants are.
Good luck. ?Post future versions in the comments below. ?I’d like to read them.
See lessA 30-something man is frustrated with his life and family and seems unable to make sense of it all until he meets a lady that wants to end it all.
I can see that this can have plenty of dramatic opportunities, but I don't know which one you are going to use. 1) Does her death or attempted suicide make him appreciate his life 2) Does helping her trigger something in him and he leaves his family to be with her, saving himself and her. 2a) Does hRead more
I can see that this can have plenty of dramatic opportunities, but I don’t know which one you are going to use.
1) Does her death or attempted suicide make him appreciate his life
2) Does helping her trigger something in him and he leaves his family to be with her, saving himself and her.
2a) Does he start an affair which makes him realise that he has it good at home.
3) Does he look at her problems and see that he is the problem and not his family.
What is the story in what you have set up as a good universe.
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