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When the most trusting man in America journeys to Nigeria to collect his expected inheritance promised to him in an e-mail by a prince, he must overcome bitter reality and find his prince in order to see the good in people once again.
The good in people is a marketing type statement not a story element. You will demonstrate that in your story, but is not the story.
The good in people is a marketing type statement not a story element. You will demonstrate that in your story, but is not the story.
See lessWhen a young woman foresees her community?s catastrophic doom, she must choose between keeping a solemn promise – and telling the life-saving truth.
I see the story as her promise not her struggle. The way it is positioned doesn't the balance the drama. Sacrifice is choosing between two equal values. Saving lives or keeping a promises is not balanced. The secret must be huge so it needs describing. If the promise is just a way of introducing staRead more
I see the story as her promise not her struggle. The way it is positioned doesn’t the balance the drama. Sacrifice is choosing between two equal values. Saving lives or keeping a promises is not balanced. The secret must be huge so it needs describing.
If the promise is just a way of introducing stakes and a ticking clock for her rehab, there may be a better way.
See lessWhen a young woman foresees her community?s catastrophic doom, she must choose between keeping a solemn promise – and telling the life-saving truth.
What sort of solemn promise could be made that would make a person question keeping that promise versus the death of people. It is too much to ask the reader to go along with. It must work in the context of your story, it just doesn't work here. I try to focus normally on people's lines and not theiRead more
What sort of solemn promise could be made that would make a person question keeping that promise versus the death of people. It is too much to ask the reader to go along with. It must work in the context of your story, it just doesn’t work here.
I try to focus normally on people’s lines and not their story, but I think you need to,find the right beats in your story to put in your line.
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