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A military school cadet must be silenced when she witnesses Cuban-Americans robbing the school?s armory. When she discovers that the guns are to be used to assassinate the president, she has only minutes to stop the killers.
Witnessing the theft of weapons that are going to be used to assassinate the President of the USA. A Military school cadet has only minutes to act and save the President. Everything else is great. And it is colour to the story. "She must be silenced" is a natural consequence of witnessing a robberyRead more
Witnessing the theft of weapons that are going to be used to assassinate the President of the USA. A Military school cadet has only minutes to act and save the President.
Everything else is great. And it is colour to the story. “She must be silenced” is a natural consequence of witnessing a robbery of this nature. Cuban_Americans is not needed as it is not a location (good for setting mood) and doesn’t provide motivation. In previous versions when you spoke of their motive it made more sense. So you can drop their ethnic backgorund.
In my shorter version the only question remaining, and is in all the version, how does she know how the weapons are going to be used?
The only minutes answers the question “just call the police”.
See lessA military school cadet must be silenced when she witnesses Cuban-Americans robbing the school?s armory. When she discovers that the guns are to be used to assassinate the president, she has only minutes to stop the killers.
Witnessing the theft of weapons that are going to be used to assassinate the President of the USA. A Military school cadet has only minutes to act and save the President. Everything else is great. And it is colour to the story. "She must be silenced" is a natural consequence of witnessing a robberyRead more
Witnessing the theft of weapons that are going to be used to assassinate the President of the USA. A Military school cadet has only minutes to act and save the President.
Everything else is great. And it is colour to the story. “She must be silenced” is a natural consequence of witnessing a robbery of this nature. Cuban_Americans is not needed as it is not a location (good for setting mood) and doesn’t provide motivation. In previous versions when you spoke of their motive it made more sense. So you can drop their ethnic backgorund.
In my shorter version the only question remaining, and is in all the version, how does she know how the weapons are going to be used?
The only minutes answers the question “just call the police”.
See lessThe first female cadet at Norton Military Institute knew plebe year would be a challenge, but she never figured it would include surviving a kidnapping during which she?s very nearly murdered and then putting her life on the line to thwart an assassination plot by Cuban-Americans outraged by the President?s initiative to normalize relations with Cuba.
I think the entire fact that she is a first year is not needed. A military cadet must escape her captors and prevent them from assassinating the President of the United States. Cuba may be a huge part of your story so add that in. A military cadet must escape her Cuban-American captors and prevent tRead more
I think the entire fact that she is a first year is not needed.
A military cadet must escape her captors and prevent them from assassinating the President of the United States.
Cuba may be a huge part of your story so add that in.
A military cadet must escape her Cuban-American captors and prevent them from assassinating the President of the United States.
You will want to make it as quick and punchy as possible as it is an action story at heart. Everything else save for the Synopsis.
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