1. Posted: January 13, 2015In:

    Without knowing it, two military college cadets stumble upon a plot by deranged Cuban Americans to assassinate the President in retaliation for his normalizing relations with Cuba. It isn?t until minutes before the plan is about to be put into action that the cadets discover what?s happening and race to stop the assassins? plan from succeeding.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    I'd start with the ticking clock to give the logline urgency. Don't need to say "without knowing", stumbling upon indicates this. Good concept, just needs tweaking.

    I’d start with the ticking clock to give the logline urgency. Don’t need to say “without knowing”, stumbling upon indicates this. Good concept, just needs tweaking.

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  2. Posted: January 13, 2015In:

    Without knowing it, two military college cadets stumble upon a plot by deranged Cuban Americans to assassinate the President in retaliation for his normalizing relations with Cuba. It isn?t until minutes before the plan is about to be put into action that the cadets discover what?s happening and race to stop the assassins? plan from succeeding.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    I'd start with the ticking clock to give the logline urgency. Don't need to say "without knowing", stumbling upon indicates this. Good concept, just needs tweaking.

    I’d start with the ticking clock to give the logline urgency. Don’t need to say “without knowing”, stumbling upon indicates this. Good concept, just needs tweaking.

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  3. Posted: January 11, 2015In:

    Investigating a robbery at the State University of New York an FBI agent discovers the item taken was a sample from the Shroud of Turin. This leads him to a conflict with a well funded murderous group of fanatics determined to clone Jesus.

    CraigDGriffiths Uberwriter

    I hope it also makes it relatable. A "that could really happen" feeling.

    I hope it also makes it relatable. A “that could really happen” feeling.

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