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A spaceship full of freaky clowns land on earth, a retired circus ringmaster must restore calm using the only thing that will save the world, his clown car.
A character-driven period piece is always going to be a really hard sell, so I think you have to load the logline with positive selling points. Is this a feel-good movie like It's A Wonderful Life? A 'state of the nation' piece teaching us moral and emotional lessons from history, like Forrest Gump?Read more
A character-driven period piece is always going to be a really hard sell, so I think you have to load the logline with positive selling points.
Is this a feel-good movie like It’s A Wonderful Life? A ‘state of the nation’ piece teaching us moral and emotional lessons from history, like Forrest Gump? Is it a star vehicle with an acting challenge for a lead actor. like Benjamin Button?
What’s going to get “bums on seats” for this movie – and how can you make that clear in your logline?
See lessA sensitive murderer character of a novel faces agonizing dilemma when a mysterious reader wreaks havoc in the fictional world, forcing him to kill his friends as an exchange for letting him enter reality and start a new life.
What is a 'sensitive murderer'? Obviously you're trying to tell us something about the central character, create a contradiction or a flaw, but I'm not sure what it is you're saying there... Your main problem, I think, is that your main character is passive. The mysterious reader is the one drivingRead more
What is a ‘sensitive murderer’? Obviously you’re trying to tell us something about the central character, create a contradiction or a flaw, but I’m not sure what it is you’re saying there…
Your main problem, I think, is that your main character is passive. The mysterious reader is the one driving the plot – at least as described in the logline – pushing the murderer around and ‘forcing’ him to kill his friends (‘forcing’ how?) Why is it important to the murderer to get into the real world? What steps could he take to make that happen?
The relationship between a character and an abusive reader is a really interesting idea, but there’s an issue with the amount of power they have over each other. The hero and the villain have to have the power to really hurt each other for a story to work – but here, the murderer has no power over the reader, and in the end, the only thing the reader can really do is threaten to walk away. How can you increase the stakes?
See lessA family-owned country club is inherited by a college dropout who struggles to prove his ability to manage the ongoing escapades of a chaotic work environment.
I've got to be honest - there's nothing technically wrong with this concept, but to me it just says "rich people problems". A family struggling to save their drought-stricken farm or their tiny pizza restaurant, sure, I'll root for them; but a country club full of rich people swilling champagne? SorRead more
I’ve got to be honest – there’s nothing technically wrong with this concept, but to me it just says “rich people problems”. A family struggling to save their drought-stricken farm or their tiny pizza restaurant, sure, I’ll root for them; but a country club full of rich people swilling champagne? Sorry, but that’s just not awakening any sympathy in me…
At the risk of sounding like a cliched dumb Hollywood exec: “Does it have to be a country club?” What is that setting giving you that you wouldn’t get from any other family business? (You may have a brilliant answer to that, of course – in which case, you need to find a way to get that uniqueness into the logline…)
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